Photo -- Easter 1963
Easter 1963 -- another planet. We look cold, like foreigners on a chemically-muted lawn, my mother, by brother, Babcia, me, our fallen shadows sprawled behind us, our father, as I recall, with...
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NE---so much is right here, but i'm going to focus on the negative.first, this pom is just too talkative---plz don't assume i am as charmed with homey details as the narrator. identify your best...
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berniehenrie -- Man, you know your way around a critique! Very helpful constructive criticism here -- and with a sense of humor yet (I laughed more than once while reading it). One clarification:...
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The MO man is thorough alrighty, there's nothing left to say. But then by studying this piece, and the devices you've used, it seems to me you're no novice either, NE. Heaney's piece is very clever......
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NE - splendid! does it want me - or make me curious enough to see the picture?mmmmmm...guess not - there's a cold crystal clear clarity in your description - like ice. very focused &...
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belly button that fastens fate is quite good J! the only problem i see - is that the picture you give of babcia - is of a younger girl - at least that's the way it came across to me - sister / fiancee...
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Thanks, all, for the sincere feedback here. Clearly the poem is a history of my thinking as I wrote the poem when it shouldn't be. Meaning? Back to the drawing board for some major overhaul and...
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Hi-- I can tell that your narrator is of Polish ancestry and that she may come from western PA thanks to "babcia"and "peeps." Yes, I am half-Polak and a yinzer. This is interesting prose, chopped up...
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Wow. Another amazing thread! Here's what I admire about this poem: many, many of the lines are spare and interesting. If you look at the line level, a lot of control is evident. I do agree, however,...
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